Is my poem okay?

Hello, i am actually a gr.7 12 year old boy. I just wondering, is my poem okay? My class had to write a poem explaining how another poet was right. The another poet wrote a poem called "Forecast." and it is about how our generaration is lazy and we don't get out to see the natures beauty. So what i had to write, was a poem on how he is right on how the outside is a great place to be, but i also included on how our genaration is not that lazy. So please read it and give me some feed back. ty BY THE WAY I DID NOT CHECK GRAMMAR IN THIS POEM

Here is my poem:

Nature has a unique beauty
That changes from time to time
You can’t just vision it
You must feel it from your heart
To understand the true meaning and form of art

This world has many seasons
That twist and turn like gears
They improve the outside beauty
Because that’s its duty
By bringing the cold, the hot, and the excitement

Today is the day
I spring out of my dark humid cave
To venture the fascinating seasons that face me
In front of me lays a strong wooden boarded fence
Once I pass it, my wonder world will begin
But before I go I must tell you
Our generation is not lazy
We do go outside, experiencing the beauty of nature
It’s just some of us that have different atmospheres
Sure, we have things that grab onto us and make us stay inside
But some of us, not all of us
Experience what’s beyond that wooden boarded fence

Now I go and grasp a handle that turns open the fence
I see and wonder what the forecast will be
Just about as the barricaded wall opens up
I clench my eyes from fear
Then suddenly a patch of warm wind
Sweeps up from the north and tickles me with sensation

This is Summer I now see
The sizzling alluring sun warms my hand like a barbeque
I hear nature buzz as little yellow creatures soar beneath my eyes
This hot dry region is the best season to make me wonder
Why stay in a lonely dark cave
When we can race across cold waters that shoot from the ground
See alien bug creatures that lure our backyard
Tan our skins with a fluorescent metal cover
Or swing to the top of the playground and over the hill
This season is got to be the most fun of the “funnest”
What more could I do, catch a ball, lay on the beach, swim in the liberty seas
I do so many things, I play sports just
We are not lazy; we go outside on a hot humid day
And copy the famous summer Olympic athletes.
But what about winter

As I take a step down my porch, a few months have past.
I don’t notice small little glaciers falling from the heavens
I see bold, rich, fluorescent, and antique colors that fill the backyard
I see tons of symbols from the Canada flag slowly fall and glide onto a pile
Branches slowly start to shake and plants decaying
Shadows start to grow and life starts to sway
Animals now sleeping
Not a sound or a peep
Everyone knows fall has begun.
Even though it’s quiet we need to still get out
We can fall in the leaves, still swing in the playground.
We can still swim in the liberty seas
Not all things have to happen in the summer

Next seasons follow through winter
Cold winds swipe down my back to send me a chilling ache
Don’t be fear of the cold, fun can still happen
Even athletes are enjoying the winter wonder land
Go ahead make me a bald headed figure that is bodied with 3 round balls.
Rub against the soft marshmallow snow creating what appears to be an angel
Stir the chocolate to make a warm delicious coco-delight.
Bobsleigh down icy driveways and crash into piles of white soft blankets
But the best experience is getting your bright red tongue stuck onto a pole or icicle
Once again, this generation is not always lazy
Some of us copy what we see on CTV Olympics

Nature isn’t over yet, there is still yet one more season
This one is the time of year blossoms bloom,
This is the year dark purple and bright red explode into the atmosphere
You see farmers picking them off the greenish trees.
Every season there is a unique thing to do
That let’s us get active to take a break from screen time.
Why think our generation is lazy
Our generation is just growing with technology
We are not just hiding in our dark caves
Take back from what you said
Cause here I go, outside to play





Answer :
It's long! That's for sure. It didn't lure me on past the first few lines, so I skipped to the last verse, and it didn't get any better, so I stopped reading again. Sorry! But you are only 12, and the fact that you are writing poetry is great. You should get better and better. Keep on keeping on.





Answer :
A writers age DOESN'T MATTER IS THE CONTENT OF HIS PLAY THAT MUST MATTER.
Your really great at writing. Remember that theres people in this world that wont like your poem. For me it was amazing! I loved how you put it together.
KEEP GOING NO MATTER WHAT.

2011 Cruise itineraries?

Not long before cruise companies launch their 2011 Cruise programme which I am sure is going to be popular especially for ships like Adonia, Queen Elizabeth and Allure of the Seas. So my questions is if you could choose any ship past, present or future and any itinerary what would you choose.





Answer :
I am not sure what cruise i would choose but i found a very interesting article about 2011 itineries and hints and tips of what to do at http://www.tonystruths.blogspot.com/

R/F my absolute zero/monarch deck?

Tree born is great for the monarch also fusion material for absolute zero and dandy lion works for EH gaia also lots of tribute fodder, give me your opinions

Elemental Heros
Monsters 20
2 Caius the Shadow Monarch
2 Thestalos the Firestorm Monarch
2 Destiny Hero - Malicious
2 Destiny Hero - Plasma
2 Dandylion
2 Treeborn Frog
2 Deep Sea Diva
1 Gorz the Emissary of Darkness
1 Dark Armed Dragon
1 Plaguespreader Zombie
1 Sangan
1 Elemental Hero Stratos
1 Elemental Hero Prisma

Spells 11
3 Miracle Fusion
1 Soul Exchange
1 Future Fusion
1 Allure of Darkness
1 Destiny Draw
1 Foolish Burial
1 Brain Control
1 Mystical Space Typhoon
1 Heavy Storm
1 Reinforcement of the Army

Traps 9
2 Phoenix Wing Wind Blast
2 Bottemless Trap Hole
1 Torrential Tribute
1 Mirror Forcr
1 Solemn Judgment
1 Trap Dustshoot

Extra Deck
3 Elemental Hero Absolute Zero
2 Elemental Hero Gaia
1 Goyo Guardian
1 Brionac, Dragon of the Ice Barrier
1 Red Dragon Archfiend
1 Stardust Dragon
1 Ally of Justice Catastor
1 Magical Android
1 Thought Ruler Archfiend
1 Colosal Fighter
1 Mist Wurm
1 Black Rose Dragon

Side Deck
3 Legendary Jujitsu Master
2 Kycoo the Ghost Destroyer
2 D.D. Crow
2 Lightning Vortex
2 Mobius the Frost Monarch
2 My Body as a Shield
2 Trap Hole





Answer :
I'd remove the thestalos for mobius because mobius can be used as fusion fodder. Thestalos really doesn't do too much to help. Soul Exchange doesn't really work too well since it doesn't allow a battle phase to occur.

Can people help me on my blackwing deck? yugioh card players only?

I need help i have a budget blackwing deck and i need some good cards for a tournament on sunday can you guys help?
Deck list:


Gorz the emissary of darkness x1
The dark creator x1
cyber dragonx1
Kycoo The Ghost Destroyer x1
spirit reaper x1
Blacwing elphin the raven x1
Blackwing sirocco the dawn x2 maybe 3
Blackwing shura the blue flame x3
Blackwing Bora the spear x3
Blackwing kalut the moon shadow x3
Blackwing blizard the far north x2
Blackwing gale the whirlwind x1

Magics

Smashing Ground x1
lightning vortex x1
Black whirlwind x2
Brain control x1
Heavy Storm x1
MST x1
My body as a shield x1
Book of moon x2
allure of darkness x1
cold wave x1

Traps

threatning roar x1
compulsory evacuation device x1
delta crow anti reverse x1
trap dustshoot x1
torrential tribute x1
bottemless trap hole x2
Recless greedx2

Synchros

aracnite magician
powertool dragon
colossal fighter
sea drgon lord gishlinodon
gaia knight the force of earth
xsaber urbellum
black rose dragon





Answer :
Dude where are the blackwing synchos? If you have the money U should add a dark armed dragon





Answer :
Monsters: 19
3x Sirocco
3x Shura
3x Bora
3x Kalut
2x Blizzard
2x Vayu Or Mistral
1x Gale
1x Dark Armed Dragon
1x D.D Crow

Spells: 11
2x Black Whirlwind
2x Book of Moon
1x Allure of Darkness
1x Lightning Vortex
1x Brain Control
1x Dark Eruption
1x Heavy Storm
1x MST
1x My Body As A Shield

Traps: 10
2x Royal Oppression (If you're running vayu)
2x Bottomless TrapHole
2x Dimensional Prison
2x Threatening Roar
1x Torrential Tribute
1x Mirror Force





Answer :
3x Blackwing sirocco the dawn
3x Blackwing shura the blue flame
3x Blackwing Kalut the Moon Shadow
2x Blackwing Bora the spear
2x Blackwing blizard the far north
2x Blackwing Vayu the Emblem of Honor
1x Blackwing gale the whirlwind
1x The Dark Creator
1x Dark Armed Dragon

Spells

1x Smashing Ground
2x Lightning Vortex
2x Black Whirlwin
1x Brain Control
1x Heavy Storm
1x MST
1x My Body as a Shield
2x Book of Moon
1x Allure of Darkness
1x Cold Wave

Traps

3x Icarus Attack
2x threatning roar
1x Pheonix Wing Wind Blast
1x Call of the Haunted
1x Solemn Judgment
Synchros

Arcanite Magician
2x Stardust Dragon
Red Dragon Archfiend
2x Blackwing- Armor Master
2x Blackwing-Armed Wing
Colossal Fighter
X Saber Urbellum
Goyo Guardian
Brionac Dragon of the Ice Barrier
black rose dragon
Gladiator Beast Gyzarus
Gladiator Beast Heraklinos